ext_23775 ([identity profile] jaxomsride.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] kalinda001 2008-01-27 09:20 pm (UTC)

Of course Avon would "trust no one"
Jenna should be careful what she wishes for or she may indeed get the "Peace" she craves.

Typo?
The rebels had found them a farther hideout.
Do you mean one farther away or an additional one. if the latter then further is the correct spelling. (At least in an UK dictionary)

slight style point.
Avon's face was strained and tired. He was leaning tiredly against the wall.
There is nothing intrinsically wrong in using the same word twice but my english teacher used to hate repetition.

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