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Apologies to those who have already read Chapter 14 of A Difference of Visions. After discussions and some valuable input by [livejournal.com profile] jaxomsride, I have made some major changes to the middle scene where Reya is interacting with the Kirsten character. As always, new changes marked in blue.

A Difference of Visions, Revised Chapter 14

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Date: 2009-04-28 11:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaxomsride.livejournal.com
Interesting changes.
Though showing how she nearly died may put some of them off the whole idea of Challenges.

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Date: 2009-04-28 11:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kalinda001.livejournal.com
The dying part wasn't part of the Challenges though. That happened after. Perhaps I could have her stress that the Challenges will be safe.

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Date: 2009-04-29 12:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jaxomsride.livejournal.com
If not "safe" at least not fatal or "maiming".


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