Moving things along faster would work better. I often skip bits if I think things are too slow, or we're lingering on scenes or situations.
I think Argus and Vila were recognisable as boys; Avon less so, but his personality was deliberately suppressed. Their capture didn't have much impact as I knew their escape wasn't going to work, but Vila's mother's did as it was more unexpected.
I'm pleased that Vila has someone to love him, and that he now knows what happened to his mother. Now Argus realises where his aggression came from--and the fact that he fought it at Zircaster (a point he should realise) I suppose he can move on to the Tellaran methods of fighting. Avon I'm not sure about. If he changes too much, he won't be Avon. I'd like to see Cally have some concerns other than Avon--and use her other skills more. She wasn't always a nurse!
Maybe Jenna could have a story arc of her own, and perhaps some investigation of that image of her mother being tortured that Zen showed her (lots more angst for you!) so that she's about more than Blake. The ship could do with her as a pilot, but OTOH she's be great as an ally with her own small fleet. Ultimately it's up to you as the author though.
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Moving things along faster would work better. I often skip bits if I think things are too slow, or we're lingering on scenes or situations.
I think Argus and Vila were recognisable as boys; Avon less so, but his personality was deliberately suppressed. Their capture didn't have much impact as I knew their escape wasn't going to work, but Vila's mother's did as it was more unexpected.
I'm pleased that Vila has someone to love him, and that he now knows what happened to his mother. Now Argus realises where his aggression came from--and the fact that he fought it at Zircaster (a point he should realise) I suppose he can move on to the Tellaran methods of fighting. Avon I'm not sure about. If he changes too much, he won't be Avon. I'd like to see Cally have some concerns other than Avon--and use her other skills more. She wasn't always a nurse!
Maybe Jenna could have a story arc of her own, and perhaps some investigation of that image of her mother being tortured that Zen showed her (lots more angst for you!) so that she's about more than Blake. The ship could do with her as a pilot, but OTOH she's be great as an ally with her own small fleet. Ultimately it's up to you as the author though.